Thursday, June 29, 2006

Self Assessment

I was quite pleased with my initial review, but could see areas where it could be improved after reading Narae and Emily’s comments. These were very helpful, as they provided an ‘outsiders’ opinion, because as the writer, you often become so involved in the piece that is difficult to objectively reflect on it.

Narae and Emily both found the original tone (self narrated by a Bonds Chesty singlet) amusing, but too unprofessional and biased towards Bonds. I kept the introduction narrated by the Chesty, as a novel way to entice the reader, but changed the tone of the rest of my review to be more objective, by not having it narrated by the Chesty. I also added some more points of criticism, so that the review is not strongly biased. In changing the tone to be more informative and objective, I hope to have allowed the reader to make their own judgments. This was an aspect that my original review lacked, so I also added some rhetoric to the revised review, to give the reader time to think for themselves.

I would grade my revised review as a D. This is because it has been well researched (as evidenced by the hyperlinks and reference list), and because it shows flexibility in writing. I changed the tone of the review dramatically, by altering the point of view of the narrator, which in turn improved the review. I did however, retain the Chesty’s point of view in the introduction and other aspects of the original review because I felt they were well written and needed no improvement.

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